The children book by Patricia L. Mervine “The Mouth With a Mind of Its Own” describes the challenges children with speech problems encounter communicating in their early childhood. In the book, Mathew for example had difficulties with speech that made him feel that his mind thought different from what he spoke. When asked his name, Mathew said he is mah-yoo. Because of this Mathew was frustrated and was not comfortable with other children at school. However, Mathew met a speech and language pathologist Mrs Hick who was able to train him. Mrs. Hick engaged Mathew in learning ways of restricting his tongue and pronouncing key words like “r, w,s,ch,sh.” Finally, Mathew got better and became a good speaker.
Hi Erick, challenges around speech is a great angle. I would add a sentence or two after your finally sentence to connect back to your angle. Perhaps Matthew getting better means the book shows all challenges can be overcome?
Grammatically, I’d like you review dependent markers. Dependent markers are words like because, where, when, after. When you see these words begin your sentences, you need a comma after the phrase it is a part of. For instance:
Because of this Mathew was frustrated and was not comfortable with other children at school. However, Mathew met a speech and language pathologist Mrs Hick who was able to train him.
Because of this, (comma) …..
Also, when using introductory phrases like for instance or for example, no matter where they fall, you should have a comma afterwards: In the book, Mathew, for example, had difficulties with speech that made him feel that his mind thought different from what he spoke.
DW