For my autoethnography, I need to have more analysis and reflection. “Remember an autoethnography talks about one personal issue and how it relates to the rest of the world.” I agree with Robert’s comment I need to relate my experiences to the whole picture, to the rest of the world. Most of my sources and personal stories are just laid out there without any thought or analyzation. There’s a connection that isn’t being made. I have to refer to specific sources to make my paper more credible. I have to question the experiences that I write about and connect them to my outside sources. My introduction needs more work, I need to give more detail before going into my body paragraphs. I also need to offer some more explanation on the topic of mental health because it may not be clear to everyone. I can be more descriptive with my anecdotes.

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